French speaker?

[sliefoxx.livejournal.com]

Hello. I am writing fic. I was hoping a French-speaker could help me write a small part of dialog. It's literally, three lines. I'm sure Google messed it up since it had problems with the word "speak".

If there is a better community for this, please let me know.

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“Je veux m'adresser à vous.” Francis said as softly as he could.

A few men glared at him. They had taken Francis’ chosen language as an insult.

Arthur pursed his lips, “Que voulez-vous?” he hissed back.

“Pour. Parler. Avec. Vous.” Francis tugged on Arthur’s sleeve.

Intended dialog:

"I want to speak with you."

"What do you want?"

"To. Speak. With. You."

Comments

Re: Adding a lil something

[sliefoxx.livejournal.com]

Oh, 4chan said the first one was correct.

If you're Quebecoi/Canadian maybe it's a regional difference?

Re: Adding a lil something

[vfragrance.livejournal.com]

Both are technically correct, I guess it's whichever you're more familiar with. sorry for the confusion.

"Tu veux quoi?" will make French teachers cringe because the structure is wrong but it's often used in casual talks when someone's pissed (like whaddya want?)

Toi and tu both mean "you" but "tu" is usually used before verbs as a pronoun. (btw, "tois" is wrong, if you're referring to multiple person, use "vous")

Re: Adding a lil something

[sliefoxx.livejournal.com]

(btw, "tois" is wrong, if you're referring to multiple person, use "vous")

Ahh ;A;

Francis is referring to Arthur alone. So, I still use tois?

Re: Adding a lil something

[vfragrance.livejournal.com]

I just noticed how unclear I sound LOL reason why I will NEVER go into teaching -nod nod-

use "toi" ;)