http://dextinfae.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] dextinfae.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] hetalia2011-04-03 09:02 am
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Letter from a Soldier

Title: Letter from a Soldier
Setting: WWII, no specific date
Characters: Alfred Jones/America (acting as the soldier writing the letter), Matthew Williams/Canada (acting as the receiver of the letter and soldier's brother), Arthur Kirkland/England (briefly mentioned as family)
Warnings: Firstly, this is my first fanfic. There is some Psychologically sensitive material regarding WWII. Also, despite the fact that Alfred wrote this, there is a lot of 'graceful' vocabulary and language used in this piece. I felt that this was required in order to bring out the true meaning behind this piece.
Feedback Questions to consider:
1. Did you think someone else could've written this letter? Why? And who would've it been addressed to?
2. Did you feel that the graceful vocabulary could've been adjusted to 'Alfred-standards'? How? (this is a very important question!)
3. Did you feel that the bold italics were distracting or brought more to the piece? 
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[identity profile] gracieg91.livejournal.com 2011-04-03 05:24 pm (UTC)(link)
Access denied :/

[identity profile] aureliuszvektor.livejournal.com 2011-04-03 05:25 pm (UTC)(link)
I would read and review this, but regrettably access is denied.

That's a very avant-garde choice, but I think ultimately it stimulates a feeling of faint regret more than any emotion betrayed by arabesques of elegant language, and, potentially, prose of a royal lilac hue.

All the same, the reader is left wishing and hoping, that in the future the situation will be rectified =)

[identity profile] aureliuszvektor.livejournal.com 2011-04-03 07:53 pm (UTC)(link)
Haha, that's okay. Just teasing you :3