Split 1/?

[lulzhana.livejournal.com]

Title: Split

Author/Artist: frmCTwthlve (aka me)

Character(s)orPairing(s): America, England, Canada (later)

Rating: K

Warnings: some rasism in later chapters.

Summary: America finds him self in the south during the Civil war. having no clue what to do he just rolls with the events. he soon discovers the horror that is slavery. America is torn mentally down the Mason–Dixon Line. How will he escape?

"America felt a pounding in his head. He had been getting a lot of those lately. It might be because of the stress. The north and south had been fighting a lot. He didn't know what to do" 

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7492529/1/Split

Comments

[transemacabre.livejournal.com]

Okay --

I suggest getting a beta. A beta would help out a lot with your grammar and spelling mistakes.

Also, it's odd to have America be so shocked at discovering slaves. Slavery had existed in British North America since 1619, and persisted in some of the Northern states until 1804, just a few decades before the Civil War. As a baby and young adult, America would've been aware of slaves.

[lulzhana.livejournal.com]

I'm just a bad writer who somehow managed to turn spell check off. and also he didn't just discover them he just can't get over the fact that someone could think they own another person (i'm trying to say that in the least jerky way possible). I thank you for your constructive criticism though.