(FanFiction) "Arthur, Arthur, Arthur." 1/1

[aquashadow13.livejournal.com]

Title: "Arthur, Arthur, Arthur,"
Author: It's-a me!
Rating: Oh don't worry, it's perfectly safe.
Characters/Pairing(s): America/England, glimpses of Canada and Denmark.
Genre: Angsty/fluffy/AU
Warnings: To be honest, I don't think there are any... except maybe severe shortness and lack of plot.
Summary: Arthur always said even heros need to be saved sometimes. All Alfred would have to do is call his name and he'd be there.
Word Count: 308



“Arthur, Arthur, Arthur,” he whispers like a mantra. “Arthur, Arthur, Arthur.” As if it would bring him here, the more he says it.
“Arthur, Arthur, Arthur...” soon enough he falls asleep, Arthur's name on his lips.

“Arthur, Arthur, Arthur,” he mumbles into his cup of coffee in the morning. “Arthur, Arthur, Arthur.”
He doesn't think the amount of times he says it makes it less powerful. It can't. It only shows his dedication to Arthur. That's what the ache in his chest means.
Right?
“Arthur, Arthur, Arthur,” he just makes sure before the clock tells him it's time for work.

“Arthur, Arthur, Arthur,” he sighs, gazing up through the elevator roof.
He should really take the stairs instead- Matthew has started to tease him a lot lately... There are real people on the stairs too, says Mathias.
“Arthur, Arthur, Arthur.” He slaps on a cheerful grin as the doors ping open.

“Arthur, Arthur, Arthur,” he breaths, leaning against the door, briefcase beside him on the floor.
“Arthur, Arthur, Arthur.”
Surely it would have worked by now...
“Arthur, Arthur, Arthur.”
Right?
“Arthur. Arthur. Arthur.”
He wouldn't leave without saying goodbye.
“Arthur. Arthur. Arthur.”
Right?
“Arthur! Arthur! ARTHUR!”
His voice rings out through the home. Silence responds.
“Arthur, Arthur, Arthur...” He won't cry. No, Heros don't cry.
“Bloody Hell, boy, what is it this time?!”
His head jerks up- No, there aren't tears on his cheeks.
“A-Arthur...” He whispers.
And Arthur's there. And so is he. His breath comes out in soft whispers of “Arthur, Arthur, Arthur.” Though, secretly, they mean “You're here, you're here, you're here.”
“That's right, lad. I won't leave again.” Arthur whispers back, gently into his ear. “I missed you.”
“I missed you too.”

Comments

[chiisana00.livejournal.com]

It is possible to indicate how Alfred keep repeating Arthur's name without actually writing out the dialogue. When you use the same thing over and over again too often, they become rather annoying.

Next time, perhaps you want to expand your fic a bit? And you need to work with paragraphing as well.

For now, well done for trying.

[jhosee92.livejournal.com]

I think it's a little annoying the fact that he's repeating arthur's name over and over again, also it's really short but i have to say that despite all that it was cute! So good job ^^